After getting some advice, I tried to fix it, but still wasn't satisfied with it, here. So I decided to use Photoshop to do some experimental cropping, here. Ultimately, I was unable to make a decision.
After putting it in my "scrap works" drawer, I came upon it again last week while re-organizing my studio. I'm a big proponent of recycling old artwork anyway; most of my collages include pieces of my work that I have "scrapped", so to speak. Call it what you will: reusing, recycling, thriftiness, or just being a plain old pack-rat. Sometimes it works beautifully, and sometimes, it doesn't, but my motto is: It's worth a try.
I've also been inspired by Jeane Myers's recent series of gorgeous re-dos at ARTIT, whose motto is similar to mine: "What's to lose...?" That's only one of many great examples, so please do check out her blog for several others that are just as awesome- as is all of her work. In fact, I just noticed that her newest post is also about a reworked piece!
Here's my final (I think) version of this piece:
Ingredients: multi-media art board, vintage maps, vintage book pages, handmade papers, joss paper, graphite, watercolor pencil, Pitt artist pen, metallic paint pens, eyelet, vellum, PVA glue, acrylic gel medium, kitchen sink (ha!).
I have cropped the top, bottom, and left side, and added more book pages and a few other bits. Of course, the main difference is the addition of the raven. I felt it needed a focal point to pull everything together, but it had to be something strong in value to hold its own against all the bright colors. My solution was to go with black, which seems to work. It's entirely possible that this piece is way overworked, though I think some of the compositional problems have been resolved. What do you think?