This has several layers, and has gone through quite a bit of ripping and scraping of its own. It didn't scan very well, I guess because of the metallic joss paper; the colors are a bit off, despite my attempt to correct them in Photoshop.
Self critique:
I like the colors, but I'm not sure if the joss paper is too bright/strong in value compared to the rest. Maybe there's too much contrast.
I think the composition is the biggest problem here. Not enough of a focal point; it's a disjointed jumble of stuff, like the inside of your kitchen junk drawer. The issue for me has always been that I have difficulty eliminating anything, so it becomes too much, too much, too much!
Maybe I should cut the sides off?
Well, it was fun, and I did learn from it. And I made a huge mess in the studio.
Your critique? Any comments, advice, and/or constructive criticism are appreciated.
Tune in next time for incarnation #4...
I have no real advice as I have been making my own messes in my space. I like the circle...the size seems perfect!
ReplyDeleteI think the joss paper provides the base to hold it all down/ focal point. The bottom below the paper needs trimming or darkening but that's all I could see. Maybe you think too much about it? And congatulations on being slected for the show!
ReplyDeleteNow HERE'S a bold and brave artist, asking her readers for critique!
ReplyDeleteThere's no way in the WORLD I feel qualified to do anything but applaud and throw roses for the beauty of your work and your courage in putting it out there. If I lived near you, I'd come by and take you out for a glass of wine and a relaxing chat about your work. Thank you for the example that you set!