Here is the finished version. I darkened parts of the background to hopefully lead the eye back toward the figure, and balance the visual "weight" of the birds. (Thanks, Michael!) What do you think?
A wonderful, excellent composition. Not to read too much into it, but it speaks to me of a number of "horizons" and varying "degrees of freedom" between the ships (2 degrees), birds (3 degrees) and The Traveller (infinite degrees), all of which can journey beyond the 2 degrees of freedom of the piece itself. Lots of possibilities for all Travellers. Thanks for sharing the development/creative process.
Hi Sharmon, sometimes all it takes are those subtle tweeks! My lap top screen doesn't give the best view of things - so it's hard for me to see the changes but I'm sure you have achieved that extra emphasis you were going for. My eye certainly settles back with the figure each time I take in the other details. It's a very cool piece that speaks to me - taking me on travels my body can't make. I like Old Friend's interpretations, too! wishing you wellness, Karin (Thanks for you comments, I did respond :)
Not a secret, but the default name of my Google shopping cart account I was using to post didn't seem appropriate at the start, so I thought I'd try something else. Sorry for the mystery!
I like both versions though I do agree that the second accomplishes what you set out to do; it's funny how we really know what a piece needs whether it comes across in comments and suggestions. Great piece!
A wonderful, excellent composition. Not to read too much into it, but it speaks to me of a number of "horizons" and varying "degrees of freedom" between the ships (2 degrees), birds (3 degrees) and The Traveller (infinite degrees), all of which can journey beyond the 2 degrees of freedom of the piece itself. Lots of possibilities for all Travellers. Thanks for sharing the development/creative process.
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ReplyDeleteThanks! I like your interpretation, which pretty much coincides with mine. BTW, why is your identity a secret?
Hi Sharmon, sometimes all it takes are those subtle tweeks! My lap top screen doesn't give the best view of things - so it's hard for me to see the changes but I'm sure you have achieved that extra emphasis you were going for. My eye certainly settles back with the figure each time I take in the other details. It's a very cool piece that speaks to me - taking me on travels my body can't make. I like Old Friend's interpretations, too!
ReplyDeletewishing you wellness, Karin
(Thanks for you comments, I did respond :)
Not a secret, but the default name of my Google shopping cart account I was using to post didn't seem appropriate at the start, so I thought I'd try something else. Sorry for the mystery!
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Wonderful piece Sharmon. The layering, the color palette and the composition all combine so well.
ReplyDeleteI like both versions though I do agree that the second accomplishes what you set out to do; it's funny how we really know what a piece needs whether it comes across in comments and suggestions.
ReplyDeleteGreat piece!
Thanks, everyone. Your time and help are very much appreciated:)
ReplyDeleteSee...you were the best judge of the piece...your adjustments made it stronger yet.
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